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lemmy.world

I am but a waiting weed

Needing for the train

Air conditioner over me

I pretend it's rain

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Bremreply
lemmy.world

If a haiku is 5x7x5, what is 7x5x7x5?

Super reverse haiku?

Seriously, though. Does this count as haiku?

Edit: Nevermind ~ it's not a thing. But it works great. So I name it Bremku, henceforth.

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OwOarchistreply
pawb.social

But a waiting weed

Train's A/C stops over me

I pretend it's rain


There, I fixed it for you.

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Bremreply
lemmy.world

I have a new friend

Who made a Bremku into

A brand new haiku


~ your's is wonderful!!! thank you so much!!!

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OwOarchistreply
pawb.social

Just your friendly neighborhood English major, doing my civic duty. o7

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English major plans

Civic Duty Spiderman

Words like web from cans

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jadejitsureply
sopuli.xyz

I, a waiting weed

Train’s A/C drips over me

This, for want of rain

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Heh, yeah. Could definitely be refined further. But I wanted to keep edits to a minimum.

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Anikireply
feddit.org

what is even the deal with haikus? why are they considered so great?

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For me the cadence makes it feel like intro development conclusion.

It's like a short story in poetic format

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Bremreply
lemmy.world

I am but a wanting weed

Growing with the Sun

The train has rolled right over me

My life has been undone

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I am but a thriving weed

Dulled not once, but twice

Let them bring it back to me

I shall sow it thrice!

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That's how we smoke them here while waiting for the Deutsche Bahn. It probably will be another 17 hours before the train arrives, but who knows? Bauen wir noch eine Tüte.

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feddit.org

In germany the train schedule is so bad not even a cactus that needs a drop of water in a thousand years could rely on the deutsche bahn.

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lemmy.ca

What happened? I was there 15 years ago and it was atomic-clock levels of accuracy.

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I don't think so, all the doors are fully flush with the sides of the car here. I was guessing eastern asia based on the zoomed in photo text (千)

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Cherry picking.

These are just weeds growing in the rail reserve, of which there are many billions which do not receive the life giving drips from the air con condenser on a briefly stopped passenger carriage.

In a couple of days the maintenance crew will spray them with glyphosate and this "tiny ecosystem" will cease to exist.

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