ee_chao lemmy.world4Hide 4 repliesIf you remove the "wait"s and move "just" to between "ocean" and "visiting," it's a haiku.16Reply
toothpaste_sandwich replythebrainbin.orgRain is the ocean just visiting the mountains and then going home again14Reply
ffakeman_pretendname replyfeddit.uk1Hide 1 replyDepending on your accent, you might have to knock that "and" or "again" off the end too.6Reply
toothpaste_sandwich replythebrainbin.orgRain is the ocean just visiting the mountains and then going home Yeah, better. Really a pretty good haiku, isn't it?19Reply
ddismay3915 lemmy.worldPiss is also just water from the ocean visiting my body and going back home again UwU2Reply
schmorp slrpnk.netThe water being is one and many, it takes many different forms in the air and in the soil, it can be gentle or destructive.2Reply
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If you remove the "wait"s and move "just" to between "ocean" and "visiting," it's a haiku.
Rain is the ocean
just visiting the mountains
and then going home again
Depending on your accent, you might have to knock that "and" or "again" off the end too.
Rain is the ocean
just visiting the mountains
and then going home
Yeah, better. Really a pretty good haiku, isn't it?
instructions unclear, getting pruny in the ocean
Snow is it being clingy
Piss is also just water from the ocean visiting my body and going back home again UwU
The water being is one and many, it takes many different forms in the air and in the soil, it can be gentle or destructive.